Introduction makes overly broad assumption about the reader

[ericherman]

You are here because you’ve discovered a challenge or an opportunity in the public sector, and you suspect that software might help. …Now what? Well, you are in the right place.

This will be true of some readers. Those same readers will likely refer their co-workers and bosses to this content. While I can imagine that the sentence may be inviting to the first reader, I can also imagine it may be equally off-putting to the referred reader.

[ericherman]

A more neutral stance and tone might look a bit like this:

If you are here because you’ve discovered a challenge or an opportunity in the public sector, and you suspect that software might help, then you are in the right place.

[matthewclaudel]

This is a good point, and I agree with your suggested sentence. Please go ahead and replace it!

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On May 31, 2022, at 6:45 AM, Eric Herman ***@***.***> wrote:  A more neutral stance and tone might look a bit like this: If you are here because you’ve discovered a challenge or an opportunity in the public sector, and you suspect that software might help, then you are in the right place. — Reply to this email directly, view it on GitHub, or unsubscribe. You are receiving this because you are subscribed to this thread.

[ericherman]

Or maybe something like:

The following material was created especially for civil servernts who have discovered a challenge or an opportunity in the public sector and suspect that software might help.

@ElenaFdR any thoughts here?